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I want to run
But the walls encage me.
The midnight shroud's tormenting work is done
And my blood-stained eyes waver but cannot see.
I want to run away
But the padlock is bound.
The demons that hover opress me to stay
And my tortured lips dare not make a sound.
I want to run far away now
But the ominous Wrath screams.
No, I must soar high! Let me by eternal vow:
To steal a sip of euphoria from Apollo's stream.
Oh, but soon I be dragged from my mere fantasy wish
Back to this deathly battlefield of infinite despair,
Where silver spears that pelt from charcoal skies never vanish
And from this flood of anguish I suppress, there leaks no tear.
Because I cannot run away,
So here I wait for my soul to decay.
But the walls encage me.
The midnight shroud's tormenting work is done
And my blood-stained eyes waver but cannot see.
I want to run away
But the padlock is bound.
The demons that hover opress me to stay
And my tortured lips dare not make a sound.
I want to run far away now
But the ominous Wrath screams.
No, I must soar high! Let me by eternal vow:
To steal a sip of euphoria from Apollo's stream.
Oh, but soon I be dragged from my mere fantasy wish
Back to this deathly battlefield of infinite despair,
Where silver spears that pelt from charcoal skies never vanish
And from this flood of anguish I suppress, there leaks no tear.
Because I cannot run away,
So here I wait for my soul to decay.
This poem was written in bed one night when I felt pretty sad and annoyed. To be honest, this may well have been the first time I wrote any poem, outside of those primary school days. Inspired by "Run" by Epik High, a song which I had on repeat during the writing of this. Constructive criticism wanted; things I could work on? Thanks
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I love the emotion in this, and the imagery.
Um, as for constructive criticism, you could make the last lines more effective and abject by making it shorter. Meh I don't know, I'm not qualified to criticise XD
The style kind of reminds me of some of the Romantics' poems of the 1800's.
Um, as for constructive criticism, you could make the last lines more effective and abject by making it shorter. Meh I don't know, I'm not qualified to criticise XD
The style kind of reminds me of some of the Romantics' poems of the 1800's.